Tuesday, March 17, 2009

All your fears

All your fears above you
They all have grown inside you
Become too heavy to handle
You they will take to the depths
It´s you they paralyze
It´s you they bury

I don´t need fears to be with me
My life is a mess anyway
You gave up to your own mind
So your fears became your king
And so you bow them, unintentionally
All your fears upon you
Has been made to be your coffin
Lähettänyt klo

8 comments:

  1. SibylMarch 19, 2009 at 6:36 PM

    First of all: it caught me that you use the word "all" in both the first two lines and that works perfectly! ^^

    And the idea works the "it's you" part, too :D

    My fav lines:

    "So your fears became your king
    And so you bow them, unintentionally
    All your fears upon you
    Has been made to be your coffin"

    The whole idea works very well and very intriguingly. Capturing :P

    And picking fav lines was difficult; I was reading the poem through and everytime I caught an exellent line to pick I found another the next second. That's rare, you know. Very good, you definitely stand out of the crowd ^^

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  2. Poet In The JarMarch 20, 2009 at 2:23 AM

    I agree, I can't pick my favorite lines at all, it's too difficult. You encapsule everything in this poem. You probably don't at all realize how I admire your writing :o But that said, this poem really got to me. Your pieces are always special, this one was bit more special-er :o

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  3. RoccariMarch 20, 2009 at 6:46 PM

    Bex: well yes, I don´t realize how much you admire my pieces.. cos I can´t understand it. really. how can anyone like this stuff? I just can´t realize it. :D but really, your comments and things you say make me defenitely believe more to myself. maybe there really is something bigger than teenage-girl´s stupid dreams...
    Roosa: you make that poem sound more complicated than it really never were :D and I totally stand out :D there are very few my age people who write poems like this ;) and if you´d know my age you´d laugh to these things here :D

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  4. SibylMarch 21, 2009 at 11:45 AM

    So how old are you?

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  5. RoccariMarch 21, 2009 at 3:33 PM

    that´s the thing I´m not sure should I tell. really. what if I´m 12? :D well I´m not, but think about it for a minute. would this poems sound same any more?

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  6. RoccariMarch 21, 2009 at 3:34 PM

    these, not this ^^

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  7. SibylMarch 21, 2009 at 4:50 PM

    It wouldn't change anything, if you ask me... As far as I know young people can have old souls and vice versa.
    But of course there's no need to tell if you don't feel like telling :)

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  8. RoccariMarch 22, 2009 at 1:55 PM

    hmm, if you´re ready.. ok, I´m only 15 :D :P you two are defenitely older than me ^^

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